Moriah Leila

I think everyone basically covered what I was going to say. I do like your piece because like ashley said you made me think. However I did find a few ...

I like this piece, it is very descriptive and the mystery of it all makes me want to read more so that I can know more. That being said here ...

Watching the video endeared me quickly to your story, although without it I wouldn't have understood the part about cheese and tommy-toes toasties. Also I am a bit confused at ...

Good work. You kept me interested the whole story. I like your characters although I think the name Merlyn is not very original. And I really like the specters, very ...

I really liked it, very exciting. You use very good descriptions and I only found a few minor things that need correcting. Dara, move , ” her mother scolded when ...

Okay, you wanted brutal honesty. I'm not really quite sure about this. It seems interesting enough, but your settings are not very well developed and I don't see a strong ...

Good job!! I really like the descriptive language you use when describing the Queen's eyes. Milantis is such a creative name. You did a really good job developing your characters ...

Disclaimer: I am about to be brutally honest, please do not take it as a personal attack, but rather as constructive criticism. "I'm not in the marsh, am I?" he ...

This is such a good piece. Your characters are well developed with strong descriptions so that I can actually visualize them in my head. I love the words you use ...

You are still sceptical. Skeptical. Yet, that, that is merely the beginning of so much more. The second that sounds like it should be changed to this. I liked it, ...

I liked it. I am really glad Cal didn't get back together with Ashley, Joanne was better for him. I'd like more because I'd really like to hear how their ...

Again, you have another satisfied customer. I love this story so much because I can kind of relate to Ashley and I can also relate to Joanne. It is such ...

I loved it!!! Even with you jumping from different perspectives and different times I loved it. It was so descriptive and deep and exciting. You kept me anticipating more just ...

I know I am probably going to sound redundant but I totally agree that the story feels rushed. Slow down and throw in some descriptions. Develop your characters so that ...

At this chance, she fussed through the collapsed tent until she found him caught in the broken rope. Not sure if I like the use of the word fussed. I ...